Kokoro Kiseki - Rough draft help / Cameo opportunity!

So I'm working on a dub of Kokoro Kiseki right now, and I have a rough draft here.

ITEM ONE(1)

I'd love it if people would take a listen and be super picky and critique the shit out of that recording. (Be as caustic as you want. I don't have feelings that can be hurt, ask Ham xD)

Specifically,

- pitch
- rhythms
- pronunciations (accuracy and consistency, e.g. if I pronounce the same thing differently in 2 different spots)
- Any section generally that sound awkward/should be rerecorded
- suggestions on timbre or style are also appreciated.

As far as noise removal, reverb, harmonies etc. I'm going to throw that in later, this is only a rough draft.

ITEM TWO (2)

I want a girl to sing Rin's part in this song! (not Kokoro, just the robot parts)

Spoiler:

If you're interested, do a quick recording (over me or a capella are both fine) for me. You don't have to worry about using autotune or w/e to make yourself sound robotic, we'll hash out all the details further down the road.

At some point down the line I want to put together a Kokoro x Kokoro Kiseki duet, but that's much farther away.

Thanks for all your help!

Yooooooo. Your name makes me HUNGRY. :[

Anyways. So I took a listen, and it's nasally (HEY, I sound pretty nasal-y too ) but it seems that you got most of the right pitches and pronunciations. At least, nothing that I could find that was off... xD I mean, well. I lied a little. You tend to be a few cents flat/sharp in some places, but it's really close to the correct pitches (I'm not going to list off every point, because I listened to it yesterday and I'm lazy and this computer has no room ) I'M NOT GOOD AT CONCRIT BUT I TRIED D:

I'd be willing to take a shot at the duet too, but I don't know this version so well. It's a bit different. And the last "watashi" isn't said in the song, at least that I can hear D:

*O*
Awesome job Lasagna~~! Even though its a rough draft, it sounds nice so far =w=b~

Hmm, your pronunciation could use a bit of work (althoughIshouldn'tbetalking)
I think after a bit more practice, it'll sound more natural because to me it doesn't sound "smooth" but I think that's just a personal/nitpicky kinda thing.

At certain parts, like Legender said, you are a bit off but since this is a rough draft I understand it's not absolutely perfect ~ I think you should redo more of the last half. I definitely think you can sound a TON better!

Anywhoo~ I might be interested in the part although...I don't know if my voice really suits Rin or not. I'll be sure to upload something sometime this weekend~

Don't count on that orz

Yeah the whole nasaly thing has been bugging me, I mean my voice is not normally like that. I think I just don't know how to pronounce certain syllables in japanese and my default "foreign language mode" is french xD which has a ton of nasaly vowels.... I just sang it right now and my "wa" in the first line is ridiculously nasal. I need someone to come on skype and fix this for me <.<;;;

i'd volunteer, but i think you've already heard me out on this issue~ maybe someone else can give some different type of advice ^^

I'd be willing to sing rin, if it's just those few lines~ i'll go record right now, lol.

lasagna wrote:

At some point down the line I want to put together a Kokoro x Kokoro Kiseki duet, but that's much farther away.

So there is this competition thing apparently. For Len and Rin duets.
The deadline is 4/4/11 (Monday).

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Anyone want to sing Kokoro (Rin's song) and enter this comp with me? (the submission would be kokoro x kokoro kiseki.)
If you do, put up your lines tomorrow by like.... 5 or 6 pm (so we have time to mix)? I can mix if you don't want to but it'd be best if we could meet for some amount of time tomorrow over skype so we can talk a bit about the project.

This will be first come first served! (Or more likely, no one will want to do this on such a short notice //OTL) It's ok if no one wants to, I'm not terribly invested in this (just found out about it 5 mins ago).

;kasjdf! There's no way I could record in time. That's okay though because I can't sing Kokoro well to save my life orz I do hope you find a partner though!

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i wish i could lol.... OTL

mm.... i'm sure someone out there already has it recorded, though people may not keep their vocals seperately...

//loli'mnothelping.

well, the deadline is tomorrow, but...

if sai records it tonight/tomorrow morning? XD you guys might be able to make it ^^

i can offer to help with mixing (i think it's allowed, right?) though i wouldn't be able to do much with it because of school and stuff tomorrow >w<''

psst, sai. get on skype <3

ORZ
I wish I could help but.....

//is currently far away from home and her dear dear mic owo

//is not helping eitherrrrr :'D

derp you should have told me you were going to do this! It sounded like no one confirmed so I didn't record anything today. I could maybe record something now but I have to be on campus like 9-7 tomorrow and no where to record on campus. <.<

EDIT ok I ninja'd something (it is terrible, really) at www.math.ucsd.edu/~b2chen/singing/kiseki-superrough.mp3
Hopefully it is something workable; let me know what I need to rerecord and I'll see if I can do something during the day.
Or you can say "this is garbage, not workable at all" which is also fine, promise I have no feelings that can be hurt.

Or if you don't want to put in the effort to do this, that is fine too.